Overall your writing is clear and concise and a pleasure to read. You have many well stated phrases. To make your writing stronger, I want you to work on combining some of your sentences to cut out ...

Redrafting is more than checking spelling and punctuation – those are important too but you can get them right when you proofread your final draft. Try to get the style of writing the way you ...

Drafting gives you the opportunity to select more precise vocabulary and shape your writing more effectively ... unlikely that his first draft and his final draft were very similar at all.